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Post by Nimras on May 26, 2006 21:01:16 GMT -5
Have fun! *grin*
Reviews for part three of my Rogue series would be much appreciated. I'll start my reviews tomorrow most likely.
EDIT: Gah, looks like I won't be able to review until Sunday or Monday; I got swallowed up by errands Saturday.
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Post by nikki on May 26, 2006 21:04:36 GMT -5
Reviews for my article "Koi and Peophins: Long Lost Siblings?" would be greatly appreciated  Thanks =) |
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Post by Deleted on May 26, 2006 21:09:42 GMT -5
Well, of course I'd appreciate reviews for my series, A Weak Heart: Part Two. Please ignore the space that got left out between scenes. --oops-- Could someone put up the all-NTWF list? I would, but I'm about to get off the computer soon and I'm trying to finish a draft of a short story. Yay! Nim and my stories are next to each other on the page! I just think that's cool... |
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Post by Belle on May 26, 2006 21:45:23 GMT -5
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Post by Dan on May 26, 2006 22:19:14 GMT -5
Court Rogue-Part 3: Good part once again. I liked the poker game at the beginning, it was described very well. I also enjoy the endings of each part, the added humor really lighten the story. I'm intrigued on what the story is with Mareian's brother, and how that's going to tie in. Good part, you're definitely building up the plot.  |
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Post by Deleted on May 27, 2006 9:46:13 GMT -5
Okay, so I was browsing through the short stories section of the NT and decided to read some stuff in order to get some inspiration... *haven't been writing lately* So here's a review!
The Dreamer
Quite a sweet story. It's a bit short, but nicely done. The descriptions feel like a grey, faded dream, not too extravagant but painting a good picture. However, plot isn't exactly that orginal, though the banishment adds quite some drama. The ending is a bit surprising and rather nice, though I felt that Psellia had her change of heart quite quickly. Overall, it was good story, with this special, faerie-like, ethereal feeling to it that I think you did a good job with.
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Post by JB on May 27, 2006 13:53:46 GMT -5
Reviews for my "The Dark Before the Dawn: The Beginng" would be much appreciated ^_^
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Post by bryallen on May 27, 2006 16:49:11 GMT -5
My comic, Today in Neopia, is in this week. (username eyeslikestars) I'll be doing some reviews tomorrow hopefully! |
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Post by darkgoddessrising on May 27, 2006 19:30:17 GMT -5
Okay, so I was browsing through the short stories section of the NT and decided to read some stuff in order to get some inspiration... *haven't been writing lately* So here's a review! The DreamerQuite a sweet story. It's a bit short, but nicely done. The descriptions feel like a grey, faded dream, not too extravagant but painting a good picture. However, plot isn't exactly that orginal, though the banishment adds quite some drama. The ending is a bit surprising and rather nice, though I felt that Psellia had her change of heart quite quickly. Overall, it was good story, with this special, faerie-like, ethereal feeling to it that I think you did a good job with. Thanks! I'll get around to reviewing, but probably not until Monday when I get off of work. Some of the stuff this week looks really interesting. |
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Post by zebraxas on May 28, 2006 3:38:08 GMT -5
Comic Reviews:Land of Pacman by pacmanite Heh, I liked this a lot. However, in the 4th and 5th panels, their eyes don't look in the right direction... for the 4th, I would recommend that the Krawk either be peering down the hole, or having his arm stretch down the hole to reach for the petpet. For the 5th panel, I think that either Snicker_Weasel should be looking down at the Krawk, or his arm should be lifted a bit to match his eyes, in a dramatic hero pose. ^^ Lord of the Lost by gliderames It might be either my type of humor or my ignorance, but I didn't really get the joke. I suppose the joke was that to not believe the shopkeeper that the Rainbow Gun was any better, but... ^^; Anyhoo, the shadows look really off, especially since only the pets have them, so I would recommend either looking at shadows in real life to get a sense of naturality, going through a shadow drawing tutorial (there's gotta be one out there, right?), or not drawing them at all. ^^;Trapped by ssjelitegirl I loved the last panel. There's nothing I would recommend. ^^The Shoyru Squadron: Agents of Faerie by the_darkjedi The sound effects were great, I couldn't help but hearing the old Batman tv series noises in my head! XD I don't have any recommendations. ^^Today in Neopia by eyeslikestars A very good answer to a very good question. I would recommend perhaps changing the degree that the Tyrannian Quiggle is facing, or perhaps just his face and the trajectory of the rocks' flight path, to make it face the middle between the Acara and the Jubjub. ^^
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Post by Deleted on May 28, 2006 9:41:11 GMT -5
Reviews for my "The Dark Before the Dawn: The Beginng" would be much appreciated ^_^ Here you go. =) I think I'm on a short story reading obsession thing right now. *can't write anything good, though* The Dark Before The Dawn: the BeginningQuite sweet, though not a totally original story. The joke and the ball was rather twisted, though the whole "my owner left us" thing feels a bit old. I like the way you portrayed their desperation and how dark it really was for them. The dialogues are nicely put in the descriptions, and I like how you top the end off with a proverb (?). The story flowed nicely, though some parts were more telling than showing, but since it's a first-person narration, that's okay. Overall it was a good short story, not too long and a nice, light-hearted read. By the way, does 'the Beginning' signify that there's more coming? Just wondering. |
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Post by estantia on May 29, 2006 8:41:28 GMT -5
reviews of "Nothing is as it seems" would be appreciated too, thanks
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Post by JB on May 29, 2006 12:31:21 GMT -5
Reviews for my "The Dark Before the Dawn: The Beginng" would be much appreciated ^_^ Here you go. =) I think I'm on a short story reading obsession thing right now. *can't write anything good, though* The Dark Before The Dawn: the BeginningQuite sweet, though not a totally original story. The joke and the ball was rather twisted, though the whole "my owner left us" thing feels a bit old. I like the way you portrayed their desperation and how dark it really was for them. The dialogues are nicely put in the descriptions, and I like how you top the end off with a proverb (?). The story flowed nicely, though some parts were more telling than showing, but since it's a first-person narration, that's okay. Overall it was a good short story, not too long and a nice, light-hearted read. By the way, does 'the Beginning' signify that there's more coming? Just wondering. Thanks for the review ^_^ I decided to call it 'The Beginning' because the second one was published before this one, and yes, I have a few more in the works =D |
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Post by Deleted on May 29, 2006 13:59:24 GMT -5
Awesome Aquatic Petpets, DudeGlad to see someone follow up on the Aquatic petpets. I love how you kept your voice the entire time--that's hard to do but it probably helped that you had in mind who was supposedly writing it as I assume it was one of your pets. The only piece of criticism I have is that listing and describing all those petpets made the article very long, which is always dangerous. But your voice kept the length of the article from getting onerous. Great bits of humor when they were least expected; even though the article was serious, it was fun.
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Post by Huntress on May 29, 2006 14:04:56 GMT -5
Would anyone like to review my "Trapped" comic? It has Kanrik... o.o
Comic reviews! Whootness... about time I did these again ^^
Land of Pacman: loved the joke x3 Though yeah, what zebraxas said, in many panels the expressions look too absent. I personally would've changed Snicker_weasel's expression in the last panel, it doesn't really match what he's saying... Other than that, the art is really nice ^^ And the shading is great.
Lord of the Lost!: if I hadn't seen this comic on the Work Reviews board before (at least I think it was there) I wouldn't really have gotten the point. And I still don't get the moral x.X; Gotta hand it to you for the art though. Most Paint-made comics are pretty sketchy but you've added all the details and shading (and heey, three-color shading at times :3 This pwns.) Though that also makes the little booth in the last panel seem weirdly off-comic as it has no shading at all. One way or another, nice work.
Shoyru Squadron: Agents of Faerie: I guess I don't have to say that the art pwns, we all know it by now x3 So many details and such a nice shading *is obsessed with details and shading* And those different fonts used for the sound effects really add a lot to the comic. Not to mention that the plotline is getting really interesting. There will be another comic in the next issue, right? Right? *frantic glare* *smack'd* o.o;
Today in Neopia: hehe, creative ^^ I like the joke. The art is also nice, only the Acara's pose bothered me a little, he looks almost like he's crawling away. According to the front paws, he's in gallop but the whole point of gallop is jumping forward, meaning that when front legs are in that specific position, the hind legs are in the air and curled under the animal's stomach while the whole body weight is carried by the one single front leg touching the ground. (Yeah, I went horse riding for a few years. How could you tell? x3)
Not gonna make any promises about any further upcoming reviews... but I'll keep this thread in my conscious x.X;
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Thanks =)
neo username - dan4884 
