Post by Twillie (Gibi) on Jul 31, 2020 21:42:22 GMT -5
~907~908~909~ Most of all, Monazite was still alone. Monazite laid down in her bed and threw the thin covers over herself. But she had no will at that moment to let herself drift off into slumber by the thoughts of her deepest fantasies and wishes. Instead, it was only when her sobs petered out was she able to fall into a dreamless sleep.
Also, if you have an entry, feel free to say whether you would like feedback or not on your piece/series! For readers, you're free to give thoughts on the NTWF entries listed above, but also any other entry in these NT issues! =D
I mentioned them in the Neopian Gloat/Cry thread, but I want to give a shout-out to the__reporter, who conducted the Series Spotlight interview with me. They're still looking for series writers to interview, so if anyone here is writing/has submitted a series and wants to do an interview of their own, definitely let them know!
Post by Twillie (Gibi) on Aug 5, 2020 15:21:18 GMT -5
Blueysicle Alrighty! I'd been slowly catching up on these throughout the week, including Part 2 even if it's from Issue 906. Between last night and today I doubled down to finally finish reading and write my thoughts, so I'll start things out with my live reactions that are less coherent but at least genuine in the moment. Maybe they'll have some value, or at least you might get a kick out of them x3
oh nuuu I hate to say it like this but I think that miner who couldn't get up tugged at my heartstrings even more because he was an aisha D: it's even worse when you're abusing any kitty creature nuuu
(this next paragraph I wrote before Cinnabar's family debt was explained, so I knew less about how things worked in Obsidian Quarry lol)
Agate and Cinnabar's interaction was interesting to me. Right now I'm not sure why Agate was being so harsh with him, and how this translates into her being concerned for him. When he asked if she's trying to get him fired, is that ultimately her goal? Is she trying to make it impossible for him to do his job so that he loses it, thus not having to work in such conditions? Or maybe trying to scare him into quitting? The fact that he's so young and is already starting a mining job I took to assume that he didn't have much choice in the matter, like Obsidian Quarry snatches them up super early rather than Cinnabar deliberately choosing to start a career. And before throwing his helmet, the only thing Cinnabar seemed to have done wrong was show up slightly late; not being able to reach is out of his control and more a sad testament to the child labor this place seems to enforce. Even if she wanted him to stop slacking for fear of him getting punished, what then was Agate hoping to happen in the case that he never found a helmet to use?
For some reason the NT formatting seems to have a problem with the word, uh, "words"? There's several spots where that word is cut out and there's a paragraph split. Not sure what that could be about.
Hello? Flicker?? Well this is an interesting turn... Haha being already familiar with Flicker, there's that thrill of seeing a notable character cameo, almost like a guest star appearance xD What has him in Obsidian Quarry and acting with such intimidation like this, though, is the real question.... (it's near midnight as I write this, so my brain may just be fuzzy remembering any Flicker backstory I've read before that may explain this x3)
It is now the next day, and I have finished all the parts so far! xD Ah, so Flicker is here probably during that time when he was bouncing between places to live after being separated from his father. I think before that time period is right where I left off in my Infinity reading, which explains why I was surprised to see him here now xD
And now I'll write some actual organized/constructive thoughts!
As you probably gathered from above, Flicker's appearance was a twist I was not expecting! My first thought after Part 3 was he got brainwashed (clearly my brain is still on Sisters of Pillar Grove x3), although now that makes sense that he's in a tight place of needing a support system, having nowhere else to go, and also just being a naive kid.
Cinnabar also makes more sense to me now, looking at my previous confusion there. My initial impression with Obsidian Quarry was that being a miner is just something you inherit after growing up there, that people stuck around simply because the generations before them did the same job and there was no room to break out of it. Thus, I was confused on what Cinnabar would do instead if he was fired, or if being fired was even an option for punishment. Has me wondering what else may be revealed about Obsidian Quarry's workings.
The mysterious rock cliffhanger was a fun twist to Part Two! I like how for each part so far, you've been able to escalate the story more and more. There's something new learned in each part, as well as self-contained dramatic moments so that each part can stand on its own a bit. Considering the medium this is, that kind of structure sounds like common sense from an outside perspective. But, coming from someone who also tries to write series, I know how difficult it can be remembering to escalate and add stakes like this, let alone actually write it into a linear story. It's something I've been working to do better myself, so seeing you do it with deceptive ease in this series is really impressive!
It was also really sweet getting to see Mona immerse herself in identifying the rock! The detailed descriptions really showed her passion for the field, plus how complex it can be and her skills to do it despite a lack of resources. I imagine this series led to a fair amount of research in geology and its scientific methods xD
Ah, the argument that's been waiting to come has finally found its time! With the amount of tension that had been brewing before, the shift in atmosphere was almost tangible for me when things finally snapped. It was almost cathartic, just that feeling of the truth finally being laid out. But lol, the awkwardness after the fight was also well done, especially with Agate going so far as to stay away overnight. As good as it can feel to speak your mind the moment, dealing with the aftermath never gets to be as fun xD
Yikes, I'm anxious to see what comes of Agate's leg; for a Neo story, there's definitely a lot in here that toes the line of NT boundaries xD Honestly I feel I can expect most any out come right now (save for the most grimdark of possibilities of course x3).
Also, I just noticed that instead of having a story snippet in their preview boxes, the latest series updates have a sentence summary that I suppose the editor wrote.
Monazite shares her discovery with Agate while things heat up at Obsidian Quarry!
Monazite and the other miners learn more about the monstrous Buzz Flicker.
This week we finally meet the mysterious Granite!
Just found that interesting, makes me wonder why they started doing that instead.