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Post by Christos on Oct 18, 2009 13:23:09 GMT -5
Yeeeeeep, I am going to try and do it this year again xD
After the pressure of Script Frenzy, I believe I can do it if I start on time xDD
Well, I am writing a story for the NT, I hope this can motivate me!
Anyway, no more info, I got all the plot planned out =D
I would REALLY appreciate it if after each day you could comment/give feedback on my story, I would love if it got in the NT =D
I have 1.2k words written down (not counting in the NaNo word count)
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Post by Zylaa on Oct 21, 2009 22:59:16 GMT -5
=D What's it about?
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Post by Christos on Oct 22, 2009 10:19:43 GMT -5
Here are the first 1.3k words if you want to read =3 Everything always starts normal! So does our story, with a young blue Kacheek.
Nivyi was holding onto the wooden staircase. He was barely able stand still as he was clmbing up, since he was holding a box full of old things in his left hand and the other hand grasping the wooden stairs. He was almost there, the small door of the attic was some more steps up. With his free hand he managed to get up and opened the door. It opened slowly with a screech. It was an old door. The only person who used it was his father, to bring his own stuff and keep them safe; but dusty!
Getting inside would be difficult. He had to kneel down, in order to lower his head. The roof above him was at his height. The box, which he was carrying all this time is now safely left on the dusty floor of the attic. He coughed a bit. From downstair he heared his mother calling him; "Nivyi, did you take your old stuff up in the attic yet?" He turned away from the box he had just left on the ground, turned towards the stairs. "I am just done!" he shouted back. At that moment, he accidentaly kicked another box and a teddy bear flew out of it.
"Oh great!" he yelled. He turned towards the teddy bear. But what was that? As he was looking at the bear, something shiny and shimmering caught his eye! A green object, that looked like a half-moon, with three spikes at equal distances. He was amazed, as he was left looking at it!
"Ooh!" he exclaimed. He reached the object slowly, as it would break at any moment. When he got near it, he noticed that the chest which held the object had two dusty letters engraved on it; FF. He slowly touched the half-moon object and lifted it up. From the very last spike of the object, there hang a small, leather, brown bag, about the size of an average TCG card. Nivyi caught the small bag before it fell on the ground. He could see his reflection, a blue Kacheek reflected from the green surface of the object. Despite it being in such a dusty chest, it was all clean and fine!
"Nivyi, have you found again something new to play with? Come downstairs at once, you have more boxes to carry!" his mother's voice made him snap out of all these thing which occured. He held the two objects tightly in his hands and rushed downstairs. He thankfully didn't lose his feet on those stairs! He quickly ran to his room and left the objects on his bed. After countless more boxes carried up to the attic, he finally lay exhausted on his bed! He was examining the mysterious objects that had the shape of a half-moon, with a big smile on his face. He loved old things and most he loved adventures! And a shiny green, spiky half-moon shaped thing, left in a dusty attic couldn't mean any less than an adventure of high standars.
A green Kacheek suddenly entered the room. Nivyi looked up to see his smaller brother, Antithet.
"Anti, anti my dear brother! Come inside and see what I found!" he encouraged him. Antithet waves at him and sits on the bed.
"What is that thing, Nivyi?" he asked him and pointed at a small button in the middle of the equipment.
"Let's find out, shall we?" Nivyi said and pressed the small button. Both their eyes look excited, as a small card slot comes out of there. Nivyi went above the card slot. Inside he found a card fitted in there, with an image of a protective force-field printed on it.
Antithet grabbed the card from inside and started inspecting it. It was blue with the image on one side and on the other side it was again blue with no image on it.
"Wow, what is this?" he asked his brother who brought the object really close to his eyes and was inspecting the card slot.
"It looks like...a card slot!" Nivyi said. He turned and caught the leather bag and gave the object and the card to his brother.
"It looks awesome!" Antithet exclaimed as he was inspecting the object too. Nivyi opened the leather bag and took out two more cards from there. The one look like a puddle of oil and the other one seemed like pink smoke.
"I wonder what would be their use..." Antithet questioned.
"Yeah, me too," Nivyi answered. "They seem to fit perfectly in that card slot, though," he continued.
Antithet quickly grabbed the pink smoke card from Nivyi's hands and fitted it inside the slot. He closed the card slot and waited.
"This one looks nice, let's put it in!" Antithet said. And waited. And waited. "Nothing seems to happen!" Antithet whined. He was holding the object in such way that his fingers fitted in the three spikes.
"Hmm, give me that," Nivyi said and reached to get it. But in the process, his hands passed over the card slot's supposed place; just above it. A fade red light came on, shining dimly. Both Nivyi and Antithet were left there, watching that. There amazement couldn't be described!
Suddenly, out of nowhere - or better - out of the object, came a sparkling pink smoke. It wasn't too thick, but it was capable of charming and stunning both the Kacheeks. It had glitters which flew around the whole room. Not windows or doors were open, so the smoke was only swirling happily inside the room. Nivyi was sitting on the bed, with big, huge eyes! His mouth was open, in the foolish way. Antithet was humpback, almost letting his body go and fall on the floor.
"Antithet, Nivyi?" their mum called out. She knocked twice on Nivyi's door before entering. Her pink head popped inside the room. Both Antithet and Nivyi were still in trance mode. They didn't even notice the Pink Kacheek which entered the room, with quick hops. She ran towards the window and opened it. The smoke started retreating slowly, getting outside to the rest of Neopia.
"What's going on here, how did this happen?" she asked, once Nivyi started regaining consciousness.
"I am waiting...how did this happen?!" she asked again and slowly shook Antithet who was still stunned. The smoke was finally retreated and Mum was standing cross-armed, looking angrily at her two sons.
"Mum! It's all this things' fault!" Nivyi jumped and pointed at the object in Antithet's hands. Antithet had regained conciousness and was looking at the object, confused.
"As soon as we put in a card...Well I don't remember, I only know that I reached to grab the object from Antithet's hands and next thing in my memory is you, standing there looking mad at us..." Nivyi tried to put his thoughts together.
Mum looked at her sons softer, like she understood the hard-to-understand part. Antithet pressed the card slot to open again.
"So you have found Feggari..." Mum said.
"The what?" they said in unison at once. They were both surprised that there mum knew something about this mysterious equipment, the so called Feggari.
Antithet grabbed the card from inside the slot and looked at it, once the card then his mum. Both Nivyi and Antithet listened to her in awe.
"This belonged to your father. In the beginning he didn't tell me anything either, but he soon spilled the beans," she said and turned towards the open window. She looked outside with a nostalgic look up on her face. Antithet gave her the card, which she raised it up and the sun shined on it.
"He told you what? Come on, tell us!" Nivyi insisted.
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