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Post by Clocky: Activity is a Thing on Mar 27, 2008 21:01:00 GMT -5
I saw! Congrats on getting in again, Sky!
I added another poem to my edit... xD I write these things fast.
... I'm feeling inspired. Time to open Notepad again! x3
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Post by Diana on Mar 27, 2008 21:10:06 GMT -5
I think I'm going to write more poems, I don't know why. It's not like I'll get a response anytime soon. But I'm bored with not being able to enter the STC...
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Post by Clocky: Activity is a Thing on Mar 27, 2008 21:12:02 GMT -5
I think I'm going to write more poems, I don't know why. It's not like I'll get a response anytime soon. But I'm bored with not being able to enter the STC... Good luck, Diana! [^_^] Edit (from my last post on the previous page. Read that for info): I wrote another poem in about... Meh, 10 minutes. x) This one is shorter, and, luckily, isn't for any Neopian holiday. xD
Skeletal figures skulk the halls,
chains rattling as they drag across the walls.
A lone skull falls off of a sleeping form,
Still snoring contently despite dropping by a Slorg.
Cloaked, undead figures, roam in wait,
Of any foolish creature trespassing of late.
They carry wands, armed and ready,
Necromancers of the dungeon,
They are formidably deadly.
A Spyder or two,
Maybe of the giant sort,
Twitter and screech,
But speak no audible word.
Endless pits,
Dangerous falls,
Undead warriors,
Vicious, all are.
In Meridell, this place is the deadlist of all...
The Oubliette,
Where the forgotten crawl.
For those who don't know, the Oubliette is an area in Neopets: The Darkest Faerie video game for PS2. It's one of the creepiest and biggest places in the entire freakin' game. xD;; Only problem with this poem? I was too eager and submitted it under the wrong category. [>_<] In an effort to fix this, I re-submitted it under it's appropriate category, Misc.. Anybody think this'll cause problems with the editor(s) thinking I'm spamming the entry form? D= Well... In any case, I like this poem. I quite enjoy writing creepier-ish things. x3 This is a rewrite of my Sophie the Swamp Witch poem, and much improved, in my opinion.  Technically a bit shorter, but only due to the combination of several lines.
Sophie, dear Sophie, so misunderstood.
Sophie, dear Sophie, lives alone in the Woods.
A small, curious Meowclops, is her only companion,
It watches her work, head usually slanted.
It watches her look through various bottles and vials,
Not knowing what's next, it simply smiles.
Sophie mutters enchanted words,
Words from times long past,
And the liquids begin to spin,
Rising with a flash.
The liquids float there,
Suspended in mid-air,
The Meowclops only blinks,
And continues it's stare.
Sophie moves to her cauldron,
And lets the magic waters fall,
Into the cauldron they go,
The colours mixing in a sprawl.
The cauldron's contents swirl and rush,
Frothing and glowing, humming in hush.
Now a new potion has been completed,
And Sophie can rest,
Before going back to work,
To make the potion it's best.
Sophie's skill never fails,
Never has she lost,
For she is the greatest,
And Sophie's the boss.
What do you guys think?  |
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Post by Diana on Mar 28, 2008 17:23:53 GMT -5
I don't know why I entered this poem. I was bored, since I couldn't enter the storytelling. I'm never doing one like that again. My options were beyond limited, and it yielded a pretty rough poem anyway. Oh, and it's crazy short. But I've seen twelve-liners get in before. Flutter, flutter, wings aflutter
A whisper of wind; the air doth mutter
Even wingbeats bring her high
Retreats to vastest cyan sky
In clouds, mist wreathes her slender stace
Ever afloat, flight's graceful dance
Kougra paws can grasp the moon
On nights when clouds don't spread their gloom
Until the sunlight brings the day
Green forests witness eth'real play
Return to sky; be free, and soar
Afloat, aflutter, forevermore |
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Post by Anjie on Mar 28, 2008 18:15:01 GMT -5
Oh, I feel like a twit! There was a mix up with my poem published on Friday, luckily the judge picked it out (even though I'm not bright enough to!) and sent me a message to fix it. How embarrasing!
Thank you, poetry judge! -Grovels-
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Post by Clocky: Activity is a Thing on Mar 28, 2008 20:33:30 GMT -5
Oh, I feel like a twit! There was a mix up with my poem published on Friday, luckily the judge picked it out (even though I'm not bright enough to!) and sent me a message to fix it. How embarrasing! Thank you, poetry judge! -Grovels- Hmm? Did the username or something get scrambled? Either way, I'm glad it can be fixed! [^_^] I don't know why I entered this poem. I was bored, since I couldn't enter the storytelling. I'm never doing one like that again. My options were beyond limited, and it yielded a pretty rough poem anyway. Oh, and it's crazy short. But I've seen twelve-liners get in before. Flutter, flutter, wings aflutter
A whisper of wind; the air doth mutter
Even wingbeats bring her high
Retreats to vastest cyan sky
In clouds, mist wreathes her slender stace
Ever afloat, flight's graceful dance
Kougra paws can grasp the moon
On nights when clouds don't spread their gloom
Until the sunlight brings the day
Green forests witness eth'real play
Return to sky; be free, and soar
Afloat, aflutter, forevermore Wow. Nice job! |
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Post by Stephanie (swordlilly) on Mar 28, 2008 21:46:39 GMT -5
I once tried something along those lines with a poem about Chia Clowns, but I'm afraid it was lost to endless holdovers. Ooh, that's the one that just recently got published! Congrats! I read it - it was very refreshing. ^^ |
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Post by Rikku on Mar 28, 2008 23:04:44 GMT -5
I love reading everyone's poems. ^_^ They're all so good!
A shack rests at the seaside,
Tumbledown hovel at water's edge,
Home to those who cheated or lied,
It's the house that police are too scared to dredge.
Walk in, sit down, pick a table, take a seat;
Opponents smirk all 'round the room.
You're here to play, they're here to beat;
Be on your guard. Never assume.
A Meerca, an Eyrie, both subtle and crazy,
Enemies that glare from across the table,
The Krawk is the worst, he's born from the sea,
A monstrosity no one has yet tried to label.
Grimtooth, the self-proclaimed master of Bilge Dice,
His eyes gleam as he pulls the coins closer.
Playing with him is like walking on thin ice,
If this game was music, he'd be a composer.
A throw of the dice, and your luck you curse,
Hand over your coins as you get up to leave.
Grimtooth smirks at your lightened purse,
And you, pale-faced, flee from this thief.
I tried rhyming for this one, and discovered that I like non-rhyming better. xD |
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Post by Anjie on Mar 28, 2008 23:46:46 GMT -5
Yup, but then I realised it had been in before! -Headdesk- Lucky for me, the fantastic poetry judge replaced it with another submission of mine.
(A million, trillion thanks again, Mysterious Poetry Judge!)
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Post by Clocky: Activity is a Thing on Mar 29, 2008 0:36:07 GMT -5
Yup, but then I realised it had been in before! -Headdesk- Lucky for me, the fantastic poetry judge replaced it with another submission of mine. (A million, trillion thanks again, Mysterious Poetry Judge!) Whoops! Easy mistake when you've been in about 5,000 times, though. xD That's a nice thing of them to do! (... Note to self: Always submit poems in groups. [>__>;]) |
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Post by Anjie on Mar 29, 2008 1:24:02 GMT -5
It was! I hope the poetry judge lurks here so they know how much I appreciate it!
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Post by Clocky: Activity is a Thing on Mar 29, 2008 2:55:13 GMT -5
It was! I hope the poetry judge lurks here so they know how much I appreciate it! At least one of them probably does. xD |
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Post by Diana on Mar 29, 2008 7:15:20 GMT -5
I love the poetry judge for accepting two terrible submissions of mine. XD
That's pretty nice of him/her, though.
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Post by Clocky: Activity is a Thing on Mar 29, 2008 13:07:01 GMT -5
I love the poetry judge for accepting two terrible submissions of mine. XD That's pretty nice of him/her, though. They accept poems they like. My first 3 were horrible by most any standard, but they got accepted. xD And yours aren't that bad! xD |
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Post by Anjie on Apr 1, 2008 7:55:45 GMT -5
Enjoyed the AF poetry update! Exciting!
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Technically a bit shorter, but only due to the combination of several lines.
