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Post by jockylocky on Sept 15, 2007 1:35:14 GMT -5
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Post by Goosh on Sept 15, 2007 8:08:15 GMT -5
ARTICLE REVIEW
"I Flew into a Tree"--and More Wacky Excuses by Playmobil
Hilarious, playmobil! And useful, now that school has started *covertly prints out a copy*. The best one had to be number 3, if only because I could easily picture my brother doing that. XDD
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Post by puffydude on Sept 15, 2007 9:21:03 GMT -5
It Rained by reggieman721
Craig, before I go any further, I must first say that that was one of the most beautiful things I have ever read. It brought a tear to my eye, and I'm not someone who's easily moved.
The heartbreat and sorrow of Drew was conveyed perfectly, and it really got into my mind and stuck there firmly, making this one of the stories I will never forget. You have a great talent for these things I'm sure a great many writers would be enourmously envious of.
The language in this was perfect, and ever word seemed to just fit in place. I could really connect with the characters and what they were feeling, and the tales of Drew and Andra's imaginary adventures here and there added extra weight.
The only criticism of this I would have is that maybe it started out a little fast, I don't know, but overall, I was completely blown away, and I can't give it any higher praise.
Brilliant.
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Post by Dragon on Sept 15, 2007 10:40:39 GMT -5
Gone BattyIt seems to me that someone has a wee bit obsession with Komori. She drew her character just like Komori's and I went to her userlookup to find she has a korbat named EchoLocation and also a Halloween Mynci. Could just be coincidence, but I thought I'd like to point this out. Hmm obsessions are funny. This wouldn't be plagirasim right? o-O
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Post by Huntress on Sept 15, 2007 11:52:17 GMT -5
Gone BattyIt seems to me that someone has a wee bit obsession with Komori. She drew her character just like Komori's and I went to her userlookup to find she has a korbat named EchoLocation and also a Halloween Mynci. Could just be coincidence, but I thought I'd like to point this out. Hmm obsessions are funny. This wouldn't be plagirasim right? o-O *checks the person's FAQ* Seems to be more of a coincidence than anything else. Though I can bet my gang o'meepits that she'll be swarmed with hatemail, and Komori with sum-n00b-stolz-Komo-mail. I'd probably just end up using non-coincidental pets in such a situation to spare everyone's nerves xD (Come to think of it, Thor does seem to have more fans at this point than Shad and Saura together >>; I think he needs a cameo.) Once I'm already posting... all reviews for S&S: That Other City are muchly appreciated, and since I seem to have gotten a cold these days, I think I'll actually be able to curl up in my chair with a cup of tea one of these days and do some reviewing (while skipping classes I can afford to skip, but that's what having a cold is all about :3)
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Post by kamikatze24 on Sept 15, 2007 12:00:30 GMT -5
Gone BattyIt seems to me that someone has a wee bit obsession with Komori. She drew her character just like Komori's and I went to her userlookup to find she has a korbat named EchoLocation and also a Halloween Mynci. Could just be coincidence, but I thought I'd like to point this out. Hmm obsessions are funny. This wouldn't be plagirasim right? o-O *checks the person's FAQ* Seems to be more of a coincidence than anything else. Though I can bet my gang o'meepits that she'll be swarmed with hatemail, and Komori with sum-n00b-stolz-Komo-mail. I'd probably just end up using non-coincidental pets in such a situation to spare everyone's nerves xD (Come to think of it, Thor does seem to have more fans at this point than Shad and Saura together >>; I think he needs a cameo.) Once I'm already posting... all reviews for S&S: That Other City are muchly appreciated, and since I seem to have gotten a cold these days, I think I'll actually be able to curl up in my chair with a cup of tea one of these days and do some reviewing (while skipping classes I can afford to skip, but that's what having a cold is all about :3) CrazyKomouri... isn't she an NTWFer?! I think we should add her to the list.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 15, 2007 12:18:17 GMT -5
It's a shame that school work is taking such a great toll on the reviews threads. =/ Today I'm celebrating my grandma's birthday, and then later I'm going to a birthday party (not my grandma's ) so I have little time for reviews. Still, I'll try and get at least two in before the week's over. Anyway, any reviews or comments for Star Power are appreciated. It's already at part five, but I think it's a quick read. Until next time I actually get to log on. ^_^;
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Post by Craig on Sept 15, 2007 13:16:02 GMT -5
It Rained by reggieman721Craig, before I go any further, I must first say that that was one of the most beautiful things I have ever read. It brought a tear to my eye, and I'm not someone who's easily moved. The heartbreat and sorrow of Drew was conveyed perfectly, and it really got into my mind and stuck there firmly, making this one of the stories I will never forget. You have a great talent for these things I'm sure a great many writers would be enourmously envious of. The language in this was perfect, and ever word seemed to just fit in place. I could really connect with the characters and what they were feeling, and the tales of Drew and Andra's imaginary adventures here and there added extra weight. The only criticism of this I would have is that maybe it started out a little fast, I don't know, but overall, I was completely blown away, and I can't give it any higher praise. Brilliant. Wow! I don't really know what to say to this, except Thank You Thank You Thank You! I can say that of all the stories I've written, I probably worked the hardest on this one (with the possible exception of my held-over series) and it means more than you could ever know to receive such a high compliment. Honestly. Thank you so, so, so much. (I'll be reviewing this issue later today and tomorrow. I can't wait to get to my continued series.)
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Post by Craig on Sept 15, 2007 14:54:06 GMT -5
Shad and Saura: That Other City - Part Fiveby: Huntress Why must you torture me?? I'm practically dying to find out what Saura overheard, and I'm hungering for some intrigue. Not that there isn't enough already, but... you know. Anyway, there's really nothing to say about your writing style anymore: visual, smooth, flawless, love it! As for the story itself, I found that, for me, this part was carried by mood. You made me feel a spectrum of different emotions, though all seemed to fall under the umbrella of somber and guarded; very clever. I'm really feeling like I'm a part of the story now, one with the characters, living and breathing with them... it's a great feeling! I always read your story first when the new NT comes around because I'm always so excited to see what happens next. Deep Secrets: Part Fourby: Fj0rd Now this is some heavy stuff! I loved this part, and I'm really liking this story so far. There really isn't anything to say about your writing (flawless) but the storyline too is absolutely incredible. A lot of things seem to be going on at once, but the movement of the story is strong and understandable. The only minor complaint I have is that there are so many characters that I sometimes forget them (I sometimes mix up Charan and Roald) but the action and dialogue are so vivid that I find it easy to picture everything that's happening. There were a lot of little things that made this part really good, as well, such as the way you described the palace being full of its material riches but empty of Neopets. And the Korbat footman, such a great character even though he was only there for a few paragraphs. Incredible. One of the best series I've read, and I can't wait to read more. I love how the rings are being passed continuously from one Neopet to the next, always from greed and always up to a higher power... very interesting. As usual, I loved it! ;D
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Post by Sabre on Sept 15, 2007 15:09:01 GMT -5
This week is a tragedy week isn't it? I just got my first tragedy in this week, and I'm not sure how well readers are going to take it because it's the sequel to one of my happier stories. O.o...
It Rained by Reggieman721 This was a really well put together story. I loved how you put in some of their adventures into it, and how you wrote it when they were saying goodbye. This was a greatly written story, and I'm glad I read it. Outsider Within: Captain Barlow by tashni This was a wonderful story, and I got sucked into it really well when Captain Barlow began to tell his story about how he started a tea tavern, even when the story wasn't at its most exciting parts. I haven't read the previous Outsider Within story, and I have a feeling that I'm going to. Thanks for writing, tashni!
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Post by Craig on Sept 15, 2007 15:18:41 GMT -5
Thanks for the review sabre! I guess I'll start my next batch of reviews with yours. I Have Hopeby: shadow_sabre_ So sad! But then, the glimmer of hope at the end was like a ray of light, a tiny bit of happy ending to a heartbreaking story of abandonment. You wrote this in a style that, to me, made the story seem very... real. Mentioning the food that they were eating, for instance, was much better than just saying "they were eating breakfast," and having such simple dialogue just seemed to make the message hit home even harder. Very well done. It's a story that's been done before, but somehow I felt that this one was different. It touched me in a place I hadn't expected. Great job. Outsider Within: Cap'n Barlowby: tashni Surprise! That's how I'd sum up this story. It stared a little slow, and I was pretty confused as to who D.A. was supposed to be (I hadn't read your previous story; I figured it out at the end though). However, once I got about a third of the way through it started to get really good, and by the end I was amazed. Very well done! Your storytelling technique was perfect. It really felt like I was sitting with the Cap'n, listening to him tell me his tale. I loved that aspect of the story, not to mention that the tale itself was very exciting. Great balance of humor throughout, I didn't notice any spelling or grammar problems, nice flow, overall a great story! The pirate talk was easy to read, and in the end I was very satisfied. Thanks for writing the story for me to enjoy! "I Flew into a Tree" -- and More Wacky Excusesby: playmobil_is_my_life There were a couple of formatting errors here, namely with "excuse #4" and the transition from your explanation of excuse #7 and the italicized ending (not sure if that one was intentional, but it confused me). But, that aside, this article made me smile. I had read your previous article, and I must say that this one was even better. The excuses were quite funny, but what really made the article was just how you wrote about them. Your little interjections throughout the text and your overall tone was perfectly done, and I have to say that it was an enjoyable read. A nice light finish to my story/article reviews! ;D Pointless Nonsense - Times Writersby: PFA This was funny! I liked the art, and the joke was hilarious. Nice contrast to the general perception that NT writers are sophisticated. *shifty eyes* Kau Coralby: Kami and Michelle I think I read this before somewhere on the forum, but it was still an entertaining comic even the second time! Very funny, nice drawing, overall a great job. ;D ...and I think that's it for my reviews this week. Reviews for my short story, It Rained, are appreciated.
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Post by jockylocky on Sept 15, 2007 15:36:25 GMT -5
Good grief, i'm so busy with my Halloween series that i cant find the time to review! I'll try to review later this week.
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Post by Sabre on Sept 15, 2007 16:04:00 GMT -5
Coming from somebody who has most of their stories in the NT be tragedies, I was very pleased. Thank you very much! This is not the end of Lerina and Zach, however...
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Post by PFA on Sept 15, 2007 16:34:01 GMT -5
Aw, my new thumbnail didn't get used. Not even my old thumbnail got used. >_> Ah well. Kau Coral by: Kami and MichelleI remember seeing this one on the NTWF somewhere before, but that's beside the point. Quite clever. And cute art.
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Post by Leslie on Sept 15, 2007 17:27:18 GMT -5
Oh, I would love it if someone could review my comic, Altadorian Cobb Salad =) I will do some comic reviews and others later on.
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