Issue 244 Reviews

[Tashni]

Some random reviews I felt like doing.

Five O'Clock Deadline by literalluau - Excellent work! I think all of us reviews get that feeling sometimes. There was a period of time where I had to re-teach myself to enjoy reading. Great job not only on the story, but in doing a great piece for Droplet's anniversary. (Dewdrop ... *snicker*)

CCR P6 by Nimras - I love it, I love the characters, and the mystery's going very nicely. One little thing I noticed is that in your longer dialogues, you put in too many descriptive speech tags. We don't need to be told every single time someone says something HOW he said it. Often we can figure it out on our own by context, voice, and how well we know the characters.

[Nimras]

Spring of Writing
by nut862

Awww…. Snowflake’s last day. *sniff sniff*

About the only thing that bothered me was the constant use of “Ms” for Snowflake and Droplet. It just seems a little to formal when she’s all by herself reading.

I really like the Mirgle references, and the Meepits envy of Droplet’s Juppie Juice supply. As well as the way Seena was tricked into starting to write by Dina. You almost get the mental image of Diana holding a trophy out with a stick and a string in front of Seena to get her to go along…

[Nimras]

Tan-Tan's Discovery
by doughnut215

Mei-Yi has a lot more patience than I do, Tan-Tan would discover that grandma kept those trees around for a reason… whipping sticks. Okay, not really – but she is a lot more calm and accepting about the whole thing than I would be.

I like how you describe her in the beginning, how she switches from the quiet happiness to the sterner, frowning grandmother as her grandson approaches… and how he brings it upon himself.

[Nimras]

Five O'Clock Deadline
by literalluau

Awww, poor little Dewdrop, she’s still a baby and is a workaholic already. *pelted by baby painted pets*

“We all know it's a bad idea to try to give you a big surprise while you're stressed out.”

Hee! This gave me the mental picture of this little baby Kougra going postal on everyone. *grin* Very cute mental picture…

[Nimras]

Notions and Nonsense: The Cure
by patjade and pteri0neo

Thank goodness for the healing springs, ne?

I like the price list in the background of the first panel, it lets you know exactly where you are, without being obnoxious. The poor little Grundo just looks miserable… pox isn’t fun no matter what form you have I guess. And the jokes funny because it’s true. *grin*

[Nimras]

Shoyru Squadron: Agents of Faerie
by the_darkjedi

MALFROY! *cough* Sorry - wrong series, my bad.

Need I say anything about your way – better – than – mine art skills? *grin*

For some reason, I had a harder time reading the speech bubbles in this installment. Did you change the font somehow? Maybe my eyes are just tired.

[Nimras]

Ehm...
by ladyariel32 and ssjelitegirl

Hee! That, boys and girls, is why the NT doesn’t have a classified section… in case you were ever curious. Very cute idea. Hehehe, nice picture of Shad in the background.

[Nimras]

Dangerously Insane
by leah_51293

*smirk* I see I’m not the only person who thought of that when playing with that dratted spellbook. Unlike me though, you have the art skills to actually pull a comic out of it. I like how you did the blushing, often times it just looks like the character has a makeup malfunction, but yours blends nicely.

[Nimras]

That Darn Yurble
by gliderames

Muahaha, the Yurble of bad toenail paint shall haunt generations of Neopians to come! I like how you drew out the alllll to express the tone in Sloths voice… He’s sound so disgusted about how he still has to follow rules even when he’s (finally) taking over Neopia. Strife might be miffed that he still has to wait 40 more years for the Sloth plot to happen though. The Yurbles cheesy grin and thumbs up is a nice touch too.

[Tashni]

Spring of Writing by nut862 - Nut, this goes in my top five favorite short stories. You wonderfully showed how most of us start our NT careers and develop as we go, showing a comparison with the seasons. It's so delightful to watch Seena take those steps we've all taken. It was a great examination of the past, present and future of the NT while also being a charming story. I really loved it, and it had just enough Meepit humor. ^_^

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nimras23 said:

Tan-Tan's Discovery
by doughnut215

Mei-Yi has a lot more patience than I do, Tan-Tan would discover that grandma kept those trees around for a reason… whipping sticks. Okay, not really – but she is a lot more calm and accepting about the whole thing than I would be.

I like how you describe her in the beginning, how she switches from the quiet happiness to the sterner, frowning grandmother as her grandson approaches… and how he brings it upon himself.

Thanks Nimras ^_^ Hehe, whipping sticks, hmm? Have to admit, I didn't think of that one xDDD

[Nimras]

Shad and Saura: A Week in Bogshot - Part Three
by ssjelitegirl

“But the difference between a nice painted Halloween Lupe and a real wild WereLupe was the difference between a sparkshooter and a Portable Kiln.”

I love this line. I’m almost tempted to make it into a banner or something….

Maybe it was just me, but I was under the understanding (that is too many ‘unders’ there) that true Werelupes had red eyes, while Halloween Lupes had green eyes? I suppose I picked it up from this background:



…I still think Clopy’s the one with sense there.

[Nimras]

An Evening in the Archives: Part One
by shadowcristal and precious_katuch14

While I found the beginning a little hard to follow (I had to read some things twice to see where you were going) I love the imagery you use. I also like the meepit plushie. It’s just so… cutely sarcastic. Can’t wait to see where you take it.

[Nimras]

Chronicles Part 6 by Nimras-

Um, although this part flowed well, and it was funny and well written, it seemed to be a filler part. I feel like I've said this a lot, and I'm sorry. Also, it seems to me that there's getting to be a multitude of characters that I'm not sure there needs to be. It's hard to remember who's who with all these names and characters. Still, a good part overall.

Well, half of it was kind of filler... I needed Mareian more mentally stable in the next chapter... The other half was actually related to the plot.

CCR:
I think you're steadily confirming my ideas, however I am now slightly suspicious of athless, which I think is intentional. Good manipulation of the audience, but then I like all of these, and mareian rocks.

Sweet little innocent Athless? ;D What's not to love about an adorable little red Draik?

CCR P6 by Nimras - I love it, I love the characters, and the mystery's going very nicely. One little thing I noticed is that in your longer dialogues, you put in too many descriptive speech tags. We don't need to be told every single time someone says something HOW he said it. Often we can figure it out on our own by context, voice, and how well we know the characters.

I've kind of noticed that too... I think it know what it is. I like to use words I find pretty, and I personally find the word 'said' to be extremely ugly.

Really, it has nothing to do with a fear of 'overusing' it, or trying to simply not use it... it's just that I hear it as a harsh, grating word.

I actually originally used 'mead' as all my 'grog' references, but Droplet changed them.... Because I think it's a pretty word.

[Belle]

doughnut215 said:

Ehm... by ladyariel32 Art by ssjelitegirl

Very funny, and the joke was communicated really well I liked that you had the classified 'zoomed in' or whatever the technical term is, rather than Sloth saying it or something like that. The art is awesome, right down to the last details; meepit plushie, quill, even a tiny trademark Shad xDD

nimras23 said:

Ehm...
by ladyariel32 and ssjelitegirl

Hee! That, boys and girls, is why the NT doesn’t have a classified section… in case you were ever curious. Very cute idea. Hehehe, nice picture of Shad in the background.

Thanks for the reviews! p:D