The Gallion ranch~ :) Scripts Open: 33!

[hakuryu86]

::)Well, I'm looking for a artists, as the topic says I've got a few scripts (i.e 5) that need artwork So if anyone's up for a collaboration


This is the new icons for the comic pacmanite made Cute, eh?

Basically, it revolves around my pets
hakuryu_86 (plushie scorchio)
PlushieThingy (plushie krawk)
Bahamut__86 (ATTENTION!!! IS NOW A PLUSHIE DRAIK)


New INFO! Comics shall now be under the name "The Gallion Ranch"

Anyway, on to the scripts!
#1
1) All 3 are exploring the Lost Tomb(shadowy outlines?)
2) click goes the trap
3) hakuryu gets a arrow straight in the gut
4) "Oh no! talk to me!" by plushiethingy
5) "be strong...and...happy" by hakuryu
6) "Will you guys cut it out? just sew him up and let's go" by bahamut With additional speech bubbles of "You're ruining the dramatic tension here!" And "My stuffing!" Done by pacmanite, Appears in Issue #235

#2
1) hakuryu & bahamut walking through someone's treasure vault
2) We really shouldn't be doing this... says bahamut
3) Unmagine bomb flies straight at bahamut, with speech bubble "what sort of treasure is this?"
4)"I hate my life" by bahamut, with fruit bomb flying across again, and speech bubble " MORE fruit? is this a garden or a treasure vault?"

#3
1) PlushieThingy and bahamut at mysterious symol hole with a meepit stuck in it "Maybe it's time for a diet?" by PlushieThingy
(Similar one has been done)

#4
1) At the Snow faerie's is hakuryu, taking a cup from the faerie, with a timer 0:03 at the right corner
2)Faerie slots cushion behind hakuryu, timer at 0:02
3) Faerie puts on bunny slippers for hakuryu, timer at 0:01
4)"NO ITEMS?!" by faerie, hakuryu shocked look, timer at 0:00
5) hakuryu outside igloo, top half in snow

#5
1) Dark cave, with hakuryu and plushiethingyboth holding torches "remember, grab something, then run." by hakuryu.
2) Beast from cave in tyrannia looms over them, "Uh oh. Wrong cave" by hakuryu Done by Amy

#6
1) At Coltzan's shrine, hakuryu gets tingly feeling
2) bahamut gets hands glowing blue
3) Plushiethingy gets burnt food
4) They get cool powers and all I get is burnt food? What a ripoff" by plushiethingy

#7
1) at underwater fishing, hakuryu fishing, line inside water
2) takes line out, message of "nothing, please be patient"
Repeat 1) & 2)
3) broken fishing pole sinking into water, with message "The reason why you keep fishing up broken fishing poles"Done by pacmanite, appears in #242

#8
1) At training school, Plushiethingy passes "codestone" to teacher. "School fee" by plushiethingy
2) "It's a island painted rock" by teacher, Plushiethingy says " Shoot, he found out"Similar one Done

#9
1) hakuryu at buried treasure, "Sorry, you won nothing"
2) hakuryu at Tombola " Sorry, you won nothing", look of annyonace
3) hakuryu at fruit machine, "Sorry, you won nothing", look of anger
4) beaten poses of neopets with the fruit machine cardOn hold

#10
1) PlushieThingy at Job agency, "Hah! I'll get a job!"
2) "Oh easy one!" plushie thingy reading job note
3) "Tada!" PlushieThingy presenting himself with job note that reads "Find 1 Krawk Plushie"

#11
1) PlushieThingy and hakuryu exploring ski
2) blank background, plushiethingy confused, hakuryu exasparated look" MAN! they took it off the database again!" by hakuryu
(similar thing can be done with Sakhmet palace)

#12
1) PlushieThingy at deserted fairground with Sidney " Sssso, sssscratch a sssscratchcard?"
2) "Sure" by plushiethingy
3) Sidney looks at plushiethingy in a wierd way.
4) "Ssssssure?" by plushiethingy, Sidney smiling and holding a scratchcard Done by pacmanite, Appears in Issue #237

#13
1) Illusen's glade, hakuryu giving some random item, "Level 5" at corner
2) repeat for level 10, 20 and then 35
3)Illusen says "I'm supposed to give you a Honey Potion, but I lost it. Be a dear and go find it will you?", hakuryu jaws dropping

#14
1) hakuryu at lever of doom, pulls it and hand takes 100 np
2) hakuryu pulls lever several times, hand takes more money
3) lever down, hand put out to hakuryu , with message " Oh, just hand over all your money, will ya?"


#15
1) hakuryu at wheel of mediocrity, spinning it.
2) Flotsam there says " I can't stand allllll the excitement"
3) Wheel lands on Fireballs
4) fireballs come raining down
5) hakuryuu saying to burnt flotsam "Can't stand the heat too I guess" Done by pacmanite, appears in issue #327

#16
1) hakuryu and plushie climbing up steep icy mountain
2) "Allllmoostt......" by plushie
3) "You LOSE!" with Tuskaninny from cliffhanger going off cliff towards them Done by pacmanite, appears in Issue #240

#17
1) Hakuryu and Magnus the Torch fighting in Ice arena, using fire breath
2) Ice starts to melt to water
3) Ice all melts
4) referee says "TIME OUT!"
5) backdrop of Ice Caves is wheeled away, replaced by backdrop of maraqua

#18
1)plushie crawling through greyish desert "Water..."
2) Vending Machine in distance
3) Plushie rushes over, pushes button
4) Can of neocola pops out
5)Opens can
6) can on floor with geyser of neocola splashing upwards with offscreen "HELP!"

#19
1) haku starts off top of hill with cheese, daytime
2) rolls down hill
3-?) gets hit by everything imaginable, potholes, tour buses, low flying aircraft, kitchen sinks. day progresses in background
?+1) haku at bottom of hill, battered says " how's that, do I get an av?" with techo holding stopwatch, background nighttime

#20
1) sign board says "Extreme Extreme Potato counter"
2) Haku says "Avatar time!"
3) Potatoes fly across screen
4) Haku gets hit with uncountable potatoes
5) "Eeeerr... 1?" by haku lying on floor, cross on signboard held by Wocky.(similar one done as well)

#21
1) At Potato counter
2) Kacheek says, "Go"
2) hakuryu, very stuffed with potato peels on the floor saying "0" Done, appears in Issue #254

#22
1)PlushieThingy at telescope room in Hall of heroes looking into telescope.
2) "HA! found it!" by Plushiethingy, looking up with black ring on right eye. Caption reads: The true secret behind the plot - TNT punk'd us. Out of date

#23
1) hakuryu in a rush feeding many gallions
2) next, he brings some gallions and ukalies out to play
3) tucks ukalies into bed
4) Exhausted hakuryu sitting on chair,"Whew, these chores are tiring..."
5) hakuryu gets idea
6) Notice on door: Gallion ranch: Train for petpet Sitter here!

#24
1)Petpet rescue setting: hakuryu jumping over lava with petpet
2)hakuryu dodging boulders with another petpet.
3)hakuryu at door way, holding green symol, with head visible only
4)"whoops" by hakuryu, with Gwyl looking annoyed at doorway still with balloon and lightmite hovering around.

#25
1)ukali crouched over a "chug bucket" with plushiethingy telling hakuryu " I told him only turmacs could roll and eat at the same time..."Done by pacmanite, appears in issue #288

#26
1)hakuryu & punchbag bob in dark "interragation" room, hakuryu saying "awright, FESS UP! where's yer cousin?!

#27
1)hakuryu & bahamut, with hakuryu giving bahamut a opened up newspaper, saying " Hey, a new colour for you!"
2) news paper puts Grey eyrie on one page, and next page is a grey paint brush, price is : More than you can afford
3)Bahamut looking very sad, hakuryu saying" er... don't think it works like that..."Kinda doesn't fit anymore considerinf she's plushie now

#28
1)King Hagan, telling plushie:
I'm not dense, youngin'. I already knew that!

2)Plushie, talking to hakuryu: I can't believe he knew even those!

3)Shot of book title is "Quotes from the wise king, Vol VII" with king hagan's picture on it. plushie's saying: "I mean, this is the latest edition!"

#29
1)Shot of Hakuryu's upper body, Hakuryu visibly tired,maybe with a few battle scars, saying " Hah! I'll beat you in one more move"

2)Same, just with Plushie this time,tired/battle "wear and tear" and he's saying "Oh really? I'll like to see you try"

3)Hakuryu, shadowed over, carrying something card-shaped, background is fire, somewhat like a tyrannian arena maybe? Haku's saying "Once I use this..."

4)Background of a house (couch and stuff?), Haku slamming down a Godori card, saying "HAH!", Plushie in distress, screaming "Noooooooo!", his cards thrown up in defeat Done by pacmanite, appears in issue #277

#30
1)Background of a mountain, hakuryu talking to plushiethingy "Hah! I could beat that shenkuu warrior anyday!"
2)hakuryu throws grapplehook, and flings himself up
3) blurred movement of hakuryu moving up mountain
4) One last big bounce for hakuryu
5)background in space, hakuryu has hit the Space station, Neon Signboard saying high Score behind him.Done by pacmanite, appears in Issue #289


NEWEST STORYLINES!
#31
1)Keyquest background, hakuryu grabbing a key ahead of random neopet #1
2) same as 1), but with different key and neopet
3) hakuryu looking all 5 keys frantically
4) hakuryu tossing all 5 keys into the air "Oh man! Where are those house keys of mine?" Done!

#32
1) grassy hill background, hakuryu and plushiethingy both looking up at the Golden pteri random event where none of your pets are pteris
2) empty background
3)hakuryu and plushiethingy dressed in pteri suits, saying "HEY! You missed us!"

#33
1) Shot of hakuryu with cool look on his face, those light streaming from back style of backgrounds "The Fearless Scorchio"
2)Closeup on hakuryu determined eyes "Brave. Lion-Hearted"
3) Shot of hakuryu's back standing on a cliff with ocean splashing up " Going where no Neopet has gone before!"
4) Hakuryu with gallions all over biting scratching nibbling,etc him "Proud Owner of 100 (Demanding) Gallions"

#34
1)Plushie and an Alien Aisha, with a RE "the Alien Aisha has given you...", the alien aisha handing something shiny to Plushie.
2)continuation of RE "Nerkimd Mania!"(the book) Plushie on top of the nerkmid machine, squeezing the book into the slot for nerkmids, saying "It... Won't... FIT!"

#35
1)hakuryu with hand raised, eyes spinning from top to bottom, with caption "Species: Scorchio
2)Hakuryu with hand down, eyes still spinning with caption "Gender: Male"
3) same as #1, with caption "Case: Black Pawkeet/Brucey B Slots withdrawl symdrome"

#36
1) Robots from Typing Terror, with the words all red
2)Shot of hakuryu at the control panel " How am I supposed to type with PAWS?!" And a accuracy score count of -20% on top


~*~ Spinoff ~*~
I've got a new line of ideas, which basically takes some proverbs we've heard and does a twist, Neopian style
#1
1) Plushiethingy at snowager, saying "Wow! you sure must be a great collector!" caption reads, "Flattery doesn't get you anywhere"
2) PlushieThingy walks away with cool neeg, Caption reads: "it gets you benefits"

#2
1) Gallion bouncing on trampoline, "what goes up must come down"
2) Gallion up in tree, "Unless it gets stuck in a tree"Done by pacmanite, appears in issue #245

#3
1) Table of fruit chias eating respective fruits "You are what you eat"
2) Hakuryu and Plushiethingy at table with plushie in their bowls, "Unless you're a Plushie pet"

#4
1) Hakuryu at library, looking at closed book "You can't tell a book by it cover"
2) shot od back of book with lines scribbles " you have to read the sypnosis"Done & appeared

#5
1) Hakuryu, Plushiethingy and bahamut all on couch "Home is where the heart is"

2) same as above, just thought clouds above each one, haku at beach, plushiethingy in space, bahamut in library, " but the mind usually wanders off"

#6
1)hakuryu carrying 2 paintbrushes walking outside "Lightning never strikes twice"
2)hakuryu with 2 piles of sludge, "But Sloth's ray will" Done!, Appears in #328

#7
1) hakuryu climbing stairs "One step at a time"
2) millions of stairs leading up to the hidden tower " and it'll take forever to reach your destination"

#8
1) plushiethingy warming an egg in a nest "Don't count your chickens before they're hatched"
2) draik pops out of egg, plushiethingy surprised "For they might be draiks"

#9
1) bahamut in chair reading a book " Silence is golden"
2) hakuryu, plushiethingy and multitudes of gallions/ukalies playing in background, bahamut annoyed " That's why it's so rare"

#10
1) hakuryu at kelp, talking to the waiter, saying about bad quality of food, no atmpsphere, lights too blinding "The customer is always right"
2) hakuryu with plate of food on his head "But you don't always have to listen"

#11
1) hakuryu chancing upon a paintbrush on the ground "The best things of life are free"
2) major fight ensues at money tree, " you just have to be fast enough"

#12
1)hakuryu sleeping under tree with gallion " let sleeping gallions lie"
2) Gallion biting hakuryu waking him up " for they demand lots of attention when awake"

#13
1)hakuryu with many gallions around him "There's always safety in numbers"
2)gallions all jumping on hakuryu " Unless you're the one taking care of them"

#14
1)plushie at bagatelle "If you don't suceed, try try again"
2)plushie, no more balls left and the bagatelle owner holding large sack o' NPs "but if you don't win after ten tries, it's probably rigged"

#15
1)hakuryu at grassy plains with a red ball thrown at him " always keep your eye on the ball"
2) hakuryu all wet, holding broken red ball " but not for too long"

#16
1) hakuryu on a hill looking at sunrise " Always look on the bright side"
2) Shot of hakuryu with dazed and spirally eyes " but remember to wear sunglasses"

#17
1)Plushie with a blank canvas in front of him " A picture paints a thousands words"
2)Plushie with canvas which is a mess " but they might be nonsensical"

~*~Event-style collab~*~
New Years Day Special!

1)hakuryu, plushie, bahamut all on a couch saying "3...2...1..."
2)All shouting "Happy 2009!"
3)Black screen with caption" Lawyerbot - We apologise for the error
4)Same as #2, except the 2009 is cancelled out and replaced with Year 11

300th Issue Collab- Specially for pacmanite!

1)Hakuryu screaming "AHHHHHH!" at Bahamut who is holding a rolled up newspaper and trying to hit a spyder

2)Hakuryu snatches the newspaper away and says, "WHAT are you doing?!" with Bahamut saying " It's just a spyder!" with a annoyed expression

3) Hakuryu says " How could you do such a cruel thing?!" Bahamut says "It's just a spyder." with a passive expression

4) Hakuryu saying "the nerve of you! I'm ashamed to call you my sister!", Bahamut saying "It's just a spyder..." with a guilty expression

5)Hakuryu saying " It's a 297 week old antique!" with Bahamut looking puzzled

6) Hakuryu looking up, saying"A mint copy of the Neopian Times Issue 3 being defiled, oh the treachery...", Bahamut looking annoyed with Hakuryu




Obviously rejected storylines (but I'm putting them here for fun):
Red Grarrl from Grarrl keno in courtroom with rows of tiny baby grarrls behind in stands, with offscreen "you have been charged with child neglect..."


well, if anyone interested again, PM me Or leave a messgae. Or neomail me at hakuryu_86! Or look for me at the Trade chats! Or...

[petlove1995]

I think #3 is really cute =3 Unfortunately, I can't draw any of those things XD

[Pacmanite]

Oooh, I'm very interested! I'm new, though. You can see some of my work on lupine_canine's petpage.

[Vyt: Down, but Not Out]

ALL of the scripts are very funny.

I MAY do #9.

[Pacmanite]

uh-oh... an april fools joke involving pastrami and space weasels?! And "I" switched with "you"?!!

Anyways, I've finished #1:



Do you reckon I should get rid of the "it's a trap" part?

[hakuryu86]

Awww... really?

thank you very much for all the comments


And thank you very very much for the wonderful comic! I feel honoured someone will draw for me ;D

[shakia]

Hey, cool ideas! ;D I wouldn't mind doing 3 and 5, those are great. I'm at school right now though, but I can give an example of my art up here later...er...if you're still looking for someone to draw these with you I mean ^^;

[hakuryu86]

Of course! I'm not going to reject anyone who actually wants to draw comics based on my scripts

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hakuryu86 said:

Of course! I'm not going to reject anyone who actually wants to draw comics based on my scripts

Hoorah. I'm really not that great at all, but I've gotten into the NT so *shrug* Here's an example of meh comic skills. Hope it's alright. ^^;
img.photobucket.com/albums/v61/Nano_cat/NeoNuttersfrozenfinal.jpg
Oh, and I know this a different account. Long story short: I logged in wrong. XP

[Pacmanite]

By the way, I made a thumbnail for these comics ^^ Still finishing the background of the ssssidney one, though.

[hakuryu86]

pacmanite said:

By the way, I made a thumbnail for these comics ^^ Still finishing the background of the ssssidney one, though.

*dies* oh my, That's just too adorable. You've really been too kind

Oh, and for an update, The first comics's out in Issue 235

[Pacmanite]

Done! But I haven't submitted it yet. If theres anything you want changed about it, say now, before I send it



Ooh! Ooh! About those new scripts, I also have a script I'll never be able get away with

#1: Random character: "Never turn your back on a peach chia..."

#2: "... or IT may turn its back on YOU." (peach chia in the background... with "cheeks")

[hakuryu86]

Nope, the comic's fine with me

EDIT: yeah, rejected storylines are ones that really crack me up all the time, too bad neopet's would never allow it

[Pacmanite]

Ok, submitted!

EDIT: yeah, rejected storylines are ones that really crack me up all the time, too bad neopet's would never allow it

xD but when I think about the sort of audience who'll be reading them, I can't really blame TNT

[Ice]

Hahah.. that's an ... interesting one, pacman. xDD