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Post by stoneman3x on Feb 23, 2003 2:35:09 GMT -5
There's no strategy in War?!?! Wait, can't you make your next card turn into a face card if you concentrate hard enough and flip it over really fast?  Hey! Sarcasm is MY department! |
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Post by stoneman3x on Feb 23, 2003 2:43:02 GMT -5
It's A Gelert Eat Gelert World Out There LOL! LOLOLOLOLOLOL! I loved this article! At first, I didn't understand what pirates had to do with anything......then I read It's So Evil Being Green Loved it! Eew...I hate the color green Thanks! I actually submitted "It's A Gelert Eat Gelert World Out There" last week... like I said, better late than never... |
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Post by Rin on Feb 23, 2003 3:01:27 GMT -5
Um... I "reviewed" some of the short stories. I haven't done this before so please bear with me.
Life as a Baby: This was full of grammatical errors, and after reading the description "more cuter" I almost stopped reading in horror. Not the most incredibly original idea, but it did have its good points. It was descriptive and the conflict with the Scorchio well done. More Lennies in stories! I confess I was hoping it would end with the cuteness-obsessed owner finally listening to him and painting him purple.
The Beginning of the Flames: It would have been nicer to have the characters descriptions integrated into the story rather than being all doled out in a chunk at the beginning. Where was the climax of this story? Obviously it's a prologue, but for a short story it's nice to have it able to stand on its own, too. It was well-written, but there could have been more character development. We know exactly what they look like, but not much about their individual personalities.
A Visit to Cockroach Towers: I'm afraid of cockroaches.. that is totally irrelevant, however. It had a good beginning, and was fairly descriptive, but I would have liked to see more of what actually happened during their stay. The ending seemed a bit abrupt.
Elephante's Quest: I very much liked the character of Hoggle, I haven't seen a lot of elderly (er, distinguished) Neopets around. Humorous light reading. Allie introduced herself as a fire faerie on the road, then an air faerie at Hoggle's house, but I'm really just nit-picking.
How Jelly World Was Created: So was she really in Jelly World, or did she just fall asleep in class? -- I liked the ending and I thought it was a good story. I was expecting a more severe repercussion for eating the jelly after the warnings, but I guess his bark was worse than his bite.
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Post by Tracy on Feb 23, 2003 3:50:07 GMT -5
I might come back and review some comics later, because I read them every week anyways. Aww, look, i'm at the bottom again  *Doesnt want to be at the bottom constantly* |
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Post by Yugo Ryan on Feb 23, 2003 3:56:50 GMT -5
I sent in DR8 three weeks ago and they finally put it up...which means i'm at...*checks userlookup* the big 32x now...
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Post by hippiesoul on Feb 23, 2003 6:37:04 GMT -5
You know, this week the last part of my series was out, so... Would anyone please review it? It's "How I Helped Destroy Neopia".
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Post by noremac9 on Feb 23, 2003 7:53:48 GMT -5
Hey! Sarcasm is MY department! Now you think you're the only one who can use sarcasm? Medic, we need a medic! |
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Post by chansey104 on Feb 23, 2003 9:08:16 GMT -5
Congrats everyone for getting in! All of your writing rules, I feel pathetic.  Especially thanks to leb388. My first time my usernames been in the paper!!! YEAH!!! Very nice writing too. I think the article part was way better than my interview. I stunk. |
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Post by sollunaestrella on Feb 23, 2003 12:31:17 GMT -5
First four short story reviews:
Life as a Baby by neomaster_49—This had way too many grammatical errors; it made me cringe with pain. It was also really confusing and flat; there wasn’t any sentence variety at all.
The Beginning of the Flames by teghan62—There were a few errors, but overall, this was a good story! I’m interested in more Flame stories. I just think that the descriptions of the pets could have been woven into the story rather than introducing the story; they didn’t really grab you into the story.
Boldheart: Starless Nights by meratocat—This could have used some editing, and it’s also really confusing….
A Visit to Cockroach Towers by milkmoocow—Uhh…this had many grammatical errors in it too, and at the end, the narrator had already left, but she/he still continued on. Meh….
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Post by sollunaestrella on Feb 23, 2003 13:00:23 GMT -5
Four more short story reviews: Elephante’s Quest by tango783529—Heehee…I liked this story. It was well-written and amusing. I like the name Hoggle, too.  How Jelly World Was Created by cutie_pie1991—This story was pretty interesting, but the ending was a little abrupt, like the whole arresting part. Overall, it was a good story. The Lucky Fighter by withdoctor12—This was a pretty good story…it didn’t seem very original, though. Still, it was interesting, and I liked it. The Manicure at Mutant High by smarties65—There were a bunch of grammatical errors, and this seemed a little corny and unbelievable. It was okay. Meh. |
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Post by LDF on Feb 23, 2003 13:03:40 GMT -5
I'm probably going to review some comics o-O After I finish my homework... And these are my opinions... so here are the first 3... On a scale:  = 1 or lower = 2  = Makes no sense at all o-O = 3-4 = 5-7  = 8-9 ;D = 10+ Oh, What Crazy Girls! Sort of funny, but the fact that the Moehog's Moehawk doesn't look entirely like a shark fin. Malchance Weird how that actually happened o-O Funny though... Captain Arlia I seriously don't get this o-O |
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Post by LDF on Feb 23, 2003 13:07:14 GMT -5
Carrot Cake Name makes no sense, but very funny though Dark Neopia I can never read this comic... Lupe Company Erm... all I have to say is that I like the drawing o-O Alpha and MuRou Great, Felabba! Very great... ;D I liked the way that Rose thought it was Dr_D... Quatringa Goes to the Movies Erm... The Private Eye-Sha is funny... Enigma Intoxicated What the...? Neopia's Troubles Erm... moving on... o-O Tales of Darigan They used Neopets Images... Copy-and-paste -.- Petpets... and lots of them! Moving on... Rascalis in Jelly World People always get sucked into Jelly when they touch it Switching Places Umm o-O I like opposable thumbs... Don't Go Out There... Enough said. Pteri Days Sweet...? No Common Sense Heh... Really Confused Great, Stone! Very great! ;D Home Spun Tails He acts like Doc Zappy o-O Something Has Happened Great, Linnen and Tdyans! ;D A Little Place They Call Neopia I don't get this. Then again I don't get a lot of things. What A Brother Can Do! Umm... o-O
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Post by teghan62 on Feb 23, 2003 13:11:11 GMT -5
The Beginning Of The Flames: Pretty good, a little confusing here and there, but overall I liked it. The Beginning of the Flames: It would have been nicer to have the characters descriptions integrated into the story rather than being all doled out in a chunk at the beginning. Where was the climax of this story? Obviously it's a prologue, but for a short story it's nice to have it able to stand on its own, too. It was well-written, but there could have been more character development. We know exactly what they look like, but not much about their individual personalities. It shouldn't have gotten in. x.X;; It was way to rushed, so I was too lazy to do it any better... feh. Edit: Gack! I missed Luna's quote... feh. Yes, I should have done that. Bug Jade about it. Yes, that is my excuse for that. Jade writes/types them. |
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Post by lupe on Feb 23, 2003 13:11:18 GMT -5
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Post by lupe on Feb 23, 2003 13:19:11 GMT -5
I sent in DR8 three weeks ago and they finally put it up...which means i'm at...*checks userlookup* the big 32x now... I didn't read much, just Dragon Thieves, DragonMist, and DDR8, so I have one review ((Kiddo's and Spike's were continued, so that's why I only have one review...)) DDR 8: Fwee! ^.^ Good job yugo! Hm, I still don't get it... I was in DDR 7, but still, no fan mail... Give me a better part!! **kicks yugo in the shin** |
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*Doesnt want to be at the bottom constantly*
= 1 or lower 
= Makes no sense at all o-O 
= 8-9 ;D = 10+