I just finished writing a series for the Neopian Times and it got accepted! It is in the Neopian Times currently up to part 5 as of issue number 820. Could someone or a few people read over the first few parts and give feedback? The last part is coming out next week.
If it's a published Neopian Times story that you'd like to get feedback on, the best place to ask for that would actually be over on the appropriate thread under Issue Previews and Reviews! The latest issue's thread hasn't been made yet, but when it is (I'll probably get on that after posting this!) you'll be listed among the other published NTWF authors, and you can make an additional post asking for feedback :3