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Post by jdb1984 on Jan 24, 2017 7:24:09 GMT -5
While at work, I was thinking that I probably should, one of these days, step out of the fan fiction realm into something original.
And the first line of a story decided to jump into my head.
"Claudia ran."
Next came what she was running from.
"She glanced back in the woods behind her. Though the shadowy figures were hidden by the darkness of the forest, she could still feel them. Still following, still pursuing."
And then how she got away (otherwise, it would be a very short adventure).
"She tripped and fell down a short ravine. Hurt, but not seriously, she struggled to get to her feet. She heard the hiss of one of the shadowy figures above her, and another leaps down to block her path.
As Claudia backed up, the dark figure advanced, until her back met with the ravine wall. Certain that the next thing she would feel would be the creature clawing her apart, she closed her eyes.
Then a bright light erupted, seen even through her closed eyes, and the creatures shreaked. Claudia opened her eyes to see what looked to be a young woman, with what seemed to be clothing made out of twigs and leaves, covering enough so not to be embarresing."
After that, I figured that the woman would be a guardian fairy (name pending, using Elaf as a placeholder) that helps any who wander into her woods.
Claudia was going to wield magic, but it was dropped in favor of being a half Catgirl (her father is a monster known as a Catman), half human. That has her shunned and even mistreated by humans. Her and her mother used to live in a hut at the edge of the woods, away from other people.
That's pretty much all I have thus far (I was going to have them go on an epic journey to retreive an orb that could banish an approcing darkness, but thought it was too cliche).
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Post by Deleted on Feb 12, 2017 10:33:05 GMT -5
I love love love your hook! Short, to the point, and it grabs you! The following text does as well, drawing you even more into the story! I love it. Amazing job!
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