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Post by Roxy on Sept 4, 2004 17:52:13 GMT -5
I'll do some random reviews later.
FYI For Reviewers Taking On My Story: I am aware of the date problems. It was all supposed to be Swimming but oh well...
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Post by tennisblondie16 on Sept 4, 2004 17:57:55 GMT -5
Okay, don't worry I'll do both articles ;D
Articles: -50 Uses for the Blurf -A Manual to Beaching…and Beaching…and Beaching! Short Stories: -The Great Kau Caper -The Day When Nobody Wrote -Where Were You? New Series: -Daughter of a Star -Princess of Erodaire III (I LOVE this series!) Continued/Finished Series: -OLFW
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Post by Retired Blub on Sept 4, 2004 17:59:33 GMT -5
Okay, don't worry I'll do both articles ;D Articles: -50 Uses for the Blurf -A Manual to Beaching…and Beaching…and Beaching! Short Stories: -The Great Kau Caper -The Day When Nobody Wrote -Where Were You? New Series: -Daughter of a Star -Princess of Erodaire III (I LOVE this series!) Continued/Finished Series: -OLFW =huggles= I didn't expect you to review my continued series! Thank j00!
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Post by Deleted on Sept 4, 2004 18:03:06 GMT -5
Thank you everyone who has reviewed pseudo and mine's comic "Yama and Ourra". Any more would be greatly appreciated! I'll review some random things later on. Hopefully I'll have time after I get my homework done.
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Post by tennisblondie16 on Sept 4, 2004 18:09:50 GMT -5
Princess of Erodaire III: Part OneWell, since I read the other two series, and loved them from the beginning I just had to read this when I saw it come out ;D I love your writing style and the way you bring out Vevina's character--it automatically makes me detest her. The thing I love about these series is they are all unique. Even the characters are unique. No one ever would've guessed how cruel King Alastare could be to his own daughter. The only problem I found was some of the sentences didn't flow for me. They seemed a bit choppy--unlike all of your other work. Otherwise I absolutely LOVED it and look forward to reading the rest! Once again, you've done an excellent job, CT!
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Post by redpen on Sept 4, 2004 18:13:50 GMT -5
As always I am reveiwing all the New+ Cont+ Series and Short stories, so if you or your friends fit under any of the those catigories get ready for my opinions. Though I may be a bit brutally honest, and if you got a mail last time from me, on paradoxialnova, that account was frozen so now I am operating out of my old account, sarquin until my newer account is properly aged.
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Post by tennisblondie16 on Sept 4, 2004 18:17:04 GMT -5
A Manual to Beaching…and Beaching…and Beaching!
Lol, this was funny! Unique, too...I've never read an article on Beaches. I also loved the Brain Tree joke ;D The only thing I found wrong was some of the jokes were a bit forced to me. Not all of them, but mostly the ones toward the introduction. Nothing personal, but I just didn't feel this was your best work. I still loved it, though! It was short and fun, you know? Meep, what a short review! Hope I helped!
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Post by tennisblondie16 on Sept 4, 2004 18:20:13 GMT -5
As always I am reveiwing all the New+ Cont+ Series and Short stories, so if you or your friends fit under any of the those catigories get ready for my opinions. Though I may be a bit brutally honest, and if you got a mail last time from me, on paradoxialnova, that account was frozen so now I am operating out of my old account, sarquin until my newer account is properly aged. Could you please review my short story, "Love You Like a Sister...?" I don't mind if you're brutally honest--I would actually appreciate it! Just as long as it helps me on what I should do next time.
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Post by Pooh on Sept 4, 2004 18:23:12 GMT -5
Aaahh! Thank you SO MUCH for the positive review guys! I am SO GLAD that you like my art! I should really work on these jokes now.... *lacks funnyness*
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Post by tennisblondie16 on Sept 4, 2004 18:25:53 GMT -5
50 Uses for the BlurfLol, this was hilarious! Very creative ideas! And also very unique...not many people know about the Blurf. There was only one thing wrong with this article, although I think you already noticed it yourself: it might be better to space out your ideas, because otherwise it makes it hard to read, and the reader will occasionally skip lines because it's too smashed together. But I think you already noticed, so no biggy! ^^ Congrats on writing your first article! Not bad at all for a first-timer!
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Post by tennisblondie16 on Sept 4, 2004 18:27:21 GMT -5
Okay, I have to go now so I'll review everything else either later on tonight or tomorrow! Sorry if I disappointed anyone who was waiting for a review, but fear not because sooner or later I'll get 'round to reviewing it!
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Post by Tahu on Sept 4, 2004 18:30:57 GMT -5
I can't beilive it! I was published! Yay!!! Published. Me. Happy. Yay!
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Post by CT on Sept 4, 2004 18:34:49 GMT -5
Eep! Thanks so much for the review; I wasn't even expecting it *hugs* I reread some of the parts in my story, and I do admit that most of the sentences were choppy, but I'll definitely work on that more. Thanks a ton for the great review once again If I happened to skip your article/story, I'm terribly sorry since I don't have a lot of time and I'm only reading the ones which catch my eye. Just be patient; I'll get a review for any missing articles/stories as soon as possible. 50 Uses for the Blurf! by monarchistknight[/b] Funny, and filled with witty and clever reasons that made sense (though I do feel awfully bad for Tarla and Sinsi). A typical, yet humorous, list article with straight-to-the point beginnings (that contain a dash of humor) and a quick ending. Most of the 50 reasons were hilarious, although some were only able to produce a chuckle out of me; nevertheless, I really enjoyed reading it, but I've never heard of a Blurf before. A Manual to Beaching…and Beaching…and Beaching! by blubblub317[/b] The beginning was direct with a dash of humor in it as well, though I did find some grammar mistakes and insertion of unnecessary words. All of the items in the checklist contained clever remarks, and the fashion tips both made me cringe and chuckle. I loved how the author created different beach spots instead of the overly-used Mystery Island and Krawk Island beaches; the Invisible Beach upon the Space Station was hilarious. Overall, a funny article that is quite helpful for any Neopian going to the beach (though the dipping-towel-in-dung thing still gives me the creeps *shudders*). Coltzan: Death By Cheese by chocolateisamust and precious_katuch14[/b] First, I must comment both of you and the article's title (that definitely caught my eye and my funny bone ). The introduction introduced the readers to the late King Coltzan in a humorous way, and I couldn't stop laughing when I read the acronym for the word cheese. All of the reasons were clever, and (no matter how crazy they sound) made sense as well; for all we know, cheese could've killed King Coltzan. Very unique topic since I'm darn sure that I've never seen an article like this before (especially since the list goes on to the negatives *chuckles* That sure made me laugh). The Charlie Chronicles: Departure From Mystery Island by roxycaligirl101[/b] Incredibly moving and heart-wrenching; every emotion and feeling that Charlie felt was perfectly described and heightened with the memories she had with Kayla. Of course, the fact that Charlie felt really bad was sort of humorous to me, though I really can't say why. The ending was insightful and full of moral, though the change from Charlie's once depressed state to her enlightened one made the story feel a bit...jagged, or un-smooth. Other than that, another great, emotional installment in the Charlie Chronicles, and (like before) I really look forward to the next journal entries. The Yurble Next Door by violinoutoftune[/b] All of the characters had well-defined personalities that shone in all of their actions and words. The tricks that they played upon Yuro and Anna were hilarious, and had me laughing the entire time I read the story. Although there weren't a lot of details, the lovely dialogue more than made up for that, and so did the 'talking bushes'. I loved how their plan during dinner completely backfired on them, since it was humorous and made me laugh out loud. The ending was sweet, and so was the moral, but I loved how the talking bushes were once again mentioned. Talking bushes...eep, that's brilliant Where Were You? by ridergirl333[/b] Very moving and touching tale, filled with hate, jealousy, anger, etc. All of the well-strung phrases were teaming with the emotion of both kings and made the story incredibly interesting; it definitely drew my attention. Of course, some of the things happening between the two kings were sort of vague, but it was quite easy for me to piece together why King Skarl and King Hagan were angry at each other. The family bond between Morguss and the two Kings was a surprising addition, and helped give the tale a bit more drama. The plot had tons of interesting twists and turns, and although all of these loose strings weren't tied at the end, I nevertheless still enjoyed it. Rider, you really are one of the greatest writers of the NT; you're descriptions, deeper meanings, and unique plots in all of your stories cease to amaze me. Love You Like a Sister… by tennisblondie16[/b] The characters in the story were developed fairly well, though I did find it odd how Heather's personality seemed to shift throughout the story. The love that Seana had for her owner, though, was really sweet, and helped give the story a nice touch. The plot went on at a normal pace at the beginning, but seemed rushed as the story progressed; Seana's personna, on the otherhand, was kept up exceptionally well. The ending was touching, especially since Seana had to commit a self-sacrifice, but it tied the tale up wonderfully.
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Post by monarchistknight on Sept 4, 2004 18:39:43 GMT -5
50 Uses for the BlurfLol, this was hilarious! Very creative ideas! And also very unique...not many people know about the Blurf. There was only one thing wrong with this article, although I think you already noticed it yourself: it might be better to space out your ideas, because otherwise it makes it hard to read, and the reader will occasionally skip lines because it's too smashed together. But I think you already noticed, so no biggy! ^^ Congrats on writing your first article! Not bad at all for a first-timer! Thanks! I always forget to put HTML in my article when I send by e-mail. This is my second article BTW. Thanks for the review again.
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Post by Tahu on Sept 4, 2004 18:41:05 GMT -5
Well, now that I am over my happy fit, can anyone reveiw my article? Conspiracy Theorys Abroad.
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